Exposition
5yrs ago, Maya Sharma received a life changing opportunity to attend Cornell University. She is now back from U.S after 4 yrs. Her family greets her at the front gate of the airport.
Inciting Incident
Maya is suddenly wakened up in the middle of a night by a loud mournful cry. The very next morning she learns that some thugs have been roaming around at nights and beating people just for fun.
Rising action
Maya reunites with some old friends and goes out for dinner. She loses track of time and it’s already dark when they end their little reunion .She then starts walking fast hoping she won’t encounter those thugs.
Climax
She suddenly hears a kid crying and some men laughing. Maya cautiously creeps behind a wall and look over to see what’s happening. Some Masked men were beating up a street child .
Falling action
Terrified and scared, she flees from the crime scene for her safety and leaves the boy alone, hurt and dying.
Resolution
Maya reaches home safely but she feels guilty for not helping the poor innocent child. She realizes her degrees and awards have taught her nothing but increased her selfishness. Selfish enough to leave an innocent child die.Maya filled with guilt, could no longer stay in India. She goes back to United States to start a new life, trying to forget everything that happened.
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ReplyDeleteI think this story would be even more interesting if you change/add...
ReplyDelete1.) Maya didn't leave India; instead, her guilt kept her in India, and she starts on a search of who those mask wearing people are, and starts to come up with a plan to stop this whole beating-people-up-just-for-fun thing.
2.) The incident inspired Maya to become a "detective" type of person... She goes off to college and major in something that would help out with the situation... after graduating from college, she goes back to India and solve the problem (if it's still happening).
Tenzin,
ReplyDeleteI agree with Daisy. First of all, I REALLY like the major theme of your story: the guilt one feels when they leave a hometown, especially when there are so many injustices there. That said, I do think you need a little bit more intrigue in your story. In most fiction, you want to give your characters something to do. Daisy's suggestion that she start investigating is a good one. Also, this is just a thought, but maybe when she goes back to Cornell she can start some kind of organization drawing people's attention to the issues in her hometown.